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The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in four countries from 1997 to 2010.

The bar chart illustrates the comparison of renewable energy in the total energy supply in Australia, Sweden,
Iceland
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 and Turkey from the period 1997 to 2010.
Overall
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, the percentage of Australia and Turkey
shown
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showed
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 a fall
toward
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over the period,
while
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 in Sweden and
Iceland
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, there
were
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was
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an
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a
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 sharp increase.
In addition
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, the proportion in
Iceland
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 was the largest in all three years.
Firstly
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, it can be seen that in Australia the percentage was below 10 in 1997,
then
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 it dropped near 7
percent
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per cent
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, before decreasing about 2% to reach its lowest proportion. Looking at Turkey, at the beginning of the period the percentage was nearly 40%, it
shown
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an
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a
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 rapid climb to overtake 40
percent
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per cent
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,
then
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 it declined to peak above 33%.
Secondly
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, in Sweden there was a steady shoot up
trund
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trend
, but it did not reach above 10%. In
Iceland
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 proportion in 2000
,
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apply
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it
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apply
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was approximately 60%, after it was near 45% in 1997, and it
peaked
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reached
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 its highest point by about 70% in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words iceland with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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