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In the past, people often lived in one house for most of their lives. Nowadays, they change their homes several times during their lifetime. Why do think this is happening? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

change of residence has become a
golobal terend
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global trend
 in recent years. There are several
resons
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reasons
 why
this
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 is happening.
This
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 phenomenon has pros and cons, but
this
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 essay will contend that
on
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 balance, the advantages of moving outweigh any drawbacks. First of all, given the current economic
crices
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crises
 and increase in house rent, the group of people who are
badly-off
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 have to move
a
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to a
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new place, which is compatible with their budget.
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, many
workforce
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workers
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 move to
suberbers
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suburbs
 because renting a flat
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in that place is budget-friendly and
affortable
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affordable
.
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, some
citizen
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citizens
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 are variety seekers
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 they try to add delivery to their life by doing some tasks, like relocation.
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,
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 individuals who are well-off because of delivery,
deciced
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decided
 to go to a new
appartement
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apartment
, which has more equipment and
fasilities
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facilities
.
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in the past, the opportunities were low, and
also
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 people were
desiseve
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disadvantaged
, so
,
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apply
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 they
prefer
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preferred
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 to live
at
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in
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a
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the
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place
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same place
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for
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throughout
the
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their
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life
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. For
nstance
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instance
, when a family used to live in a
roral
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 area, it was challenging to change their lifestyle,
interest
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interests
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, and
go
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move
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 to urban areas. In conclusion, I strongly agree with the idea since living has shifted constantly
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. Admittedly
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, the relocation has
proused
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produced
 some positive outcomes, but
yet
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questions remain about its long-term effectiveness.

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grammar
Improve grammar, spelling and punctuation; many words are misspelled which makes meaning unclear.
style
Use consistent capitalization at the start of sentences and for proper nouns.
content
Develop each main point with clear, specific ideas and link them to the question.
task response
Explain whether moving is positive or negative with clear reasoning and examples.
coherence
Use simple linking words to show order and comparison (for example, firstly, secondly, however, in addition).
content
There is a clear attempt to answer both parts of the question.
structure
Conclusion states an opinion.
content
Some examples are given to support ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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