Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

University
students
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' obligation is to learn deeply about their major throughout their
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. Usually,
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their major to pursue a
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career
in the
field
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.
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, in most professional
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, workers need to be able to do tasks outside their main job
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these skills may
acquired
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be acquired
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from learning additional subjects during
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study
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. I strongly agree that
students
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need to learn
in addition
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to their main
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, but in an elective course
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. Learning only from the main
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may not cover some skills that are
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for working. Having an elective course
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several benefits for
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, it can increase
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' accountability, because they
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willing to be in the class. Having a variety of classes can
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help
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to
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not get easily drained with the
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that they are learning.
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but not least,
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can gain
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a network
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from other major
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, and
network
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is a very
much
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important aspect for working in the future. On the opposite side, some people believe that learning other
than
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subjects than
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the main
subject
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might be distracting. The
times
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that should be used
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enhance their knowledge in the
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used for learning unrelated things
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they might see it as a waste of time. Learning
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with the
subject
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throughout the study can produce more graduates with higher qualifications. By having better competencies,
students
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will have better working opportunities in the future. In some
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field
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,
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as medicine, it can be more suitable
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a very focused and specific
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. In conclusion, the two views
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its
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own benefits, which can be experienced depending on the perspective.

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task
Add more clear reasons for each view. Give one or two specific examples to back them up.
cohesion
Make each paragraph focus on one main idea. Use simple links to show how ideas go from one to the next.
language
Check grammar and spelling. Use basic sentence form and avoid hard words.
structure
Ensure the final sentence clear says your own view.
strength
The writer shows a clear view that supports extra subjects.
cohesion
Good use of contrast shift with 'On the opposite side'.
strength
Some real ideas like networking and medicine show relevance.
structure
The essay keeps a steady flow and ends with a conclusion.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Broaden
  • Perspectives
  • Specialize
  • Critical thinking
  • Problem-solving skills
  • Career success
  • Interdisciplinary connections
  • Structured path
  • Clear goals
  • Creativity
  • Innovation
  • Academic credibility
  • Recognition
  • Balance
  • Exploring
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