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The performance of staff can have a significant impact on the success of a company. What can companies do to increase staff productivity

Society is very different today from the past, especially
how
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in how
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companies
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increase
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staff
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productivity
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.
Ther
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 are many
companies
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huge
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company
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companies
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 and small
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company
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companies
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.
However
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,
employee
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productivity
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 is one of the most important factors for a
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companies
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company's
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 success .
This
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 essay will examine what
can
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companies can
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companies
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 do to
increase
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staff
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productivity
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. There are several effective ways
companies
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 can
increase
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employee
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productivity
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.
First,
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company
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the company
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 should provide
comfortable
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a comfortable
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 environment.
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, when
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 feel great can do amazing
work
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. More and more
employees
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 prefer a
company
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have
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 a safe environment.
Second,
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companies
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 must
training
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train
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employee
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 skills.
Companies
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 should learn
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to build employees
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employees
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employees'
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 confidence,
honest
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,good
value
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values
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 and
helpful
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helpfulness
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. Clear goals help
employees
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 to
make
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know
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 what
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company
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the company
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 need to
work
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.
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 Mean, the smart
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 chose the clever
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 who
have
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 a high university degree. Third,
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company
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the company
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 should have a great
manager
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.
Great
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manager
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help
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helps
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 to communicate good and
clear
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clearly
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Good
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manager
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 quickly
solve
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solves
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 any problem for
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company
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the company
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.
Finaly
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Finally
,
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company
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the company
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 can support one
employee
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 to
productive
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be productive
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by
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in
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 many
things
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ways
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.
For
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example
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 the
manager
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 chose every month one of the
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employee
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employees
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 who
great
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did great
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work
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. And give
bonus
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a bonus
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for
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to
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best
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the best
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employee
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. Learn
work
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help to
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to help
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do
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make
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 butter. Positive communication
lead
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leads
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 to have strong
company
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 and
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increase
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increases
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staff
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productivity
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. In conclusion, it is easy to see that there are several points to
increase
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staff
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productivity
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.
Staff
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productivity
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 should follow these ways to have
wonderful
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a wonderful
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company
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structure and content
Your essay has a fair try to answer the question. Put one main idea in each paragraph and give a short, real example for each point.
language
Fix wrong facts and use easy, clear words. Say 'a company' and 'employees' for general talk.
structure
Intro and conclusion exist and they talk about the topic.
content
Some ideas are clear, like a safe work place and a good manager.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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