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Band 3

You should spend about 40 mins. Many people think that mobile phones should be banned in public places such as libraries, shops and public transport. Do you agree or disagree

There is no
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denying
 the fact that mobile
phone
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 plays a crucial role not only in the
lives
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 of individuals but
also
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 in the economy.
While
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 it is a commonly held belief that
cellphone
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 must be banned in
the
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public
city
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, there is
also
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 an argument opposite that. In my opinion, I consider that people need their cell
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phone
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phones
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 when they go out.
To begin
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 with, it is widely believed that mobile
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phone
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phones
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 should not
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it
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in public places
, one
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. One
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 clear negative is
individuals
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that individuals
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 who mostly spend their time
on
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scrolling on social media like
Tik Tok
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by avioding
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avoid
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enjoy
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enjoying
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 their time
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such
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 as
,
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 not
enioy
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enjoying
 their
caffee
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coffee
,
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 or shopping.
Moreover
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, another essential point is
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banning
 in special places like libraries and
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religious
place
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places
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.
For example
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,
the
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recent
studied
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 show that 88% of people that less using social
medi
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media
 being
more
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are
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 happier. Another point to consider, cell
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phone
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phones
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there is
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have
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a
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huge advantages, we need
use
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to use
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phone
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phones
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 to order a
texi
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taxi
, or go to
subway
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the subway
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 or
buying
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 anything by credit card because it makes our
lives
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is
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easier and faster.
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, if we open our
phone
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 and research
about
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anything
like
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, like
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shop
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a shop
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, we
meight
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might
 get a better
apportunity
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opportunity
 or
unique
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a unique
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 experience. In
conculsion
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conclusion
, despite people having different views. I believe that
cell
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phone
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 has become a big part of our
lives
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.
However
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, we should focus on our
lives
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 and
do
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not use it for a
while
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.

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task
Plan your ideas. Show one view and then one or two short points that support it. Put a short plan at the start or end of the essay to help me see your aim.
coherence
Use a clear path in the text. Make each paragraph talk on one idea. Use simple link words like first, also, but, then, in conclusion.
language
Use easy word form and fix big grammar errors. Stick to common words and simple phrase.
evidence
Give real and true or safe facts. Avoid wrong or made up numbers.
idea
The essay tries to give a clear view on the topic.
language
Some good use of simple facts about daily life use of phone.
structure
The write up has a plan with an intro, body, and conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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