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Media coverage of violent crimes frightens people and encourages criminals.THerefore, some people believe that this type of news should not be reported in newspapers or shown on TV.

Today,we see a lot of
news
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 about crimes on TV and in newspapers.In my opinion,
crime
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news
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 has both bad and good sides. First,
crime
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news
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 can make
people
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 feel very afraid.When
people
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 read about violence,they worry about their safety.Second,some bad
people
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 might see these
news
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 and try to copy the crimes.They see the fame of the criminal and want to be like them.
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,
crime
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news
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 is
also
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 helpful.It makes
people
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 more careful.If we know there is a their in the area,we
look
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 our doors better.
Also
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,the media helps the police.Sometimes,
people
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 see the
news
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 and tell the police where the criminal is hiding. In conclusion, I think
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we
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 should not stop
crime
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news
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.
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 important to know what is happening.But
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the media ought to report the
news
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 in a way that helps
people
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 stay safe.

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content
Your view is clear; you argue for not stopping crime news, and you note both sides.
grammar
Use simple words and short sentences to keep meaning clear.
cohesion
Link words help; use 'First', 'Next', 'Also', 'But', 'However', 'In conclusion' to move ideas.
structure
Make one idea in each paragraph; start with a short topic sentence.
grammar
Check for small errors in spelling and spaces (e.g. 'e' should be 'we', 'their' vs 'there').
idea
You show a clear view on the topic and give your own idea.
coherence
You use words to link ideas and move from one point to the next.
structure
You end with a small conclusion that restates your view.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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