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The diagram below shows how geothermal energy is used to produce electricity.

The diagram displays the procedure to produce
electricy
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electricity
 by underground hot rocks .
Overall
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, there are five steps to be included for electricity production from the beginning.
Firstly
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, cold
water
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 is pumped down into the
earth
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earth,
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where
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which
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 is approximately 4.5 km deep.
Then
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, the
water
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go
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goes
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 through the injection well to pass the geothermal zone where it is heated by hot rocks.
After
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this
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 step, the heated
water
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 is collected by the production well, which allows the hot
water
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enter
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to enter
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condenser
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the condenser
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 afterwards. In the next step,
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the tubine
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tubine
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turbine
 is powered by the steam from the hot
water
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and
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, and
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then
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 the generator is allowed to produce electricity by
transmition
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transmission
 of
such
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 power.
Finally
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, the produced
electricy
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electricity
 could be
transmited
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transmitted
 to the network
which
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, which
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 allows it can be used by the public.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • geothermal energy
  • generate electricity
  • diagram
  • volcano
  • magma reservoirs
  • deep underground
  • heat
  • steam
  • geothermal plant
  • turbine
  • condensed
  • pumped back
  • underground reservoirs
  • transmitted
  • power grid
  • distribution
  • continuous
  • renewable
  • volcanic activity
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