IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. why do you think this is happening? what can government do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced. give reason and examples.

These days,
people
Use synonyms
 are producing lots and lots of
rubbish
Use synonyms
. In
this
Linking Words
 essay, I am going to write the reasons for
this
Linking Words
,
Punctuation problem
apply
show examples
and the solutions. One of the primary causes for
this
Linking Words
 increase in producing
rubbish
Use synonyms
 is that
people
Use synonyms
 are buying more than they really need.
This
Linking Words
 problem must be considered because when
people
Use synonyms
 purchase things that they don’t need, they will absolutely throw them
.
Rephrase
away.
show examples
Moreover
Linking Words
, as long as individuals buy, companies manufacture, and after individuals buy from companies, they throw away what they have purchased. In a simple way, we can say “the more
people
Use synonyms
 buy, the more they throw”.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, another primary reason for
this
Linking Words
 problem is that
people
Use synonyms
 don’t recycle. If
people
Use synonyms
 were recycling, throwing
rubbish
Use synonyms
 would not be a bad thing because the
rubbish
Use synonyms
 would be recycled and it would be used again.
Due to
Linking Words
 the huge impact of
this
Linking Words
 disaster, governments must work harder to solve
this
Linking Words
 issue and decrease the amount of
rubbish
Use synonyms
. One of the solutions is to provide recycling containers. They must provide it everywhere to make it accessible to everyone. Another solution that should be considered is spreading awareness among society. By telling the risks of
this
Linking Words
 disaster, telling the huge importance of recycling, and reducing their consumption.
To conclude
Linking Words
, producing huge amounts of
rubbish
Use synonyms
 is a big issue that must be solved by the governments.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task response
Plan the essay. Put one big idea in each para and make a path from start to end.
task response
Add more real facts or small examples to back each idea.
coherence
Use more clear links to join ideas from sentence to sentence.
idea
The plan to cut waste is clear.
structure
Some link words are used and help flow.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: