Some people believe that famous celebrities are poor role models for teenagers, while others think they can be a source of inspiration. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of celebrities as role models for young people.

There are a
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advantages
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and
disadvantages
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about
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celebrities
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being
role
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models
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for young
people
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. Some
people
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can be nice with teenagers, but not everyone. A
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of
people
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think that there are more
advantages
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, but I do not think the same. So what are the
advantages
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and
disadvantages
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celebrities
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being
role
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models
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for younger
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Firstly
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, the most important advantage is that young
people
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can find ways to get over the obstacles in their lives. Students often face
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problems that they find hard to overcome.
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bullying. Teenagers go online and start searching for tips on how to deal with bullying. A
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of
celebrities
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have faced
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bullying
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they try to help young
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celebrities
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are older than
students
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students,
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they find a
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to help others. Another advantage is that
celebrities
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can be your inspiration. To illustrate
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imagine that you found a celebrity
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has perfect looks and you want to be like them. You get a
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of motivation
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you start exercising, eating healthier
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you find a
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to look the best. Most
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are very tolerant
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they want to help others, so if you do not know where to look for
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advice,
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go on social media
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you will find ways to get better.
On the other hand
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celebrities
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being
role
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models
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can have
disadvantages
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too. The most important disadvantage is that some
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can be very cruel.
People
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that
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are known not always want the best for others, so
then
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they can try to get you to your lowest point. What I mean is that if you really want to achieve something and you ask for
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help,
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they can act very nice towards you
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in their
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minds,
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they would want the worst for you
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they can be secretly praying for your biggest downfall too. So asking for help from
celebrities
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can be a bad idea. So don'
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trust everyone online. Another disadvantage is that
celebrities
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use a
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of
photoshop
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and the posts on their social media accounts are usually fake. What I mean is that a
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of Lithuanian influencers
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themselves as the most beautiful
persons
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people
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, but when you see them in real
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life,
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they do not look that
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. Young
people
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choose them as their inspiration and try very bad ways,
for example
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, to lose weight. It leads to them being sick and having a
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of problems with their mental health. So some
celebrities
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may act very differently in real life
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they don'
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show that side online. Never trust everything
that is
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posted online. Don'
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forget that
photoshops exist
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. In conclusion, I think that there are more
disadvantages
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than
advantages
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how
celebrities
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can be
role
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models
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for young
people
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. Sometimes
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can be your motivation, but sometimes they can humble you and cause your downfall. Think with your own mind and don'
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let anyone get in your
way
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • role model
  • celebrity
  • teenager
  • influence
  • inspiration
  • example
  • behavior
  • attitude
  • hard work
  • talent
  • success
  • charity
  • responsibility
  • media
  • image
  • reality
  • balance
  • critical thinking
  • guidance
  • peer pressure
  • privacy
  • fame
  • money
  • ethics
  • kindness
  • resilience
  • discipline
  • goal
  • study
  • sport
  • health
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