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Band 2

many people say that the only way to ensure a good job is to complete a course in university education. to what extend do you agree or disagree

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Introduction
Many people think
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 that the only way to ensure a good
job
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 is to
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complete
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course
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universty
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university
education
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. In my
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opinion
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i
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I
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 agree.
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One of the main
reason
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reasons
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, that if you complete your
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course
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course,
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 you will have some points and ideas about your
job
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its
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 important to
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finish
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coure
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course
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example,
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the
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 doctor can't be a doctor if he
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didn't finish
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.
so
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 basically
finshing
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finishing
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cours
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course
 is quite important.
Body paragraph 2
In
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 the other
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 there
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 some people
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disagreeing
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pointof veiw
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point of view
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 not
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necessary
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complete
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course
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 in university
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 because they might think they will find a
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 anyway
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its
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 actually not that deep with them
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, and
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 I understand them
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dont
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don't
 want to be
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something
 big and find a good
job
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Conclusion
In
conclousion
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conclusion
,I
beleive
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believe
 that a good
job
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 is
comming
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coming
 from good
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education
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education,
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 so work hard till you make it and do
every thing
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everything
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 for
education
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 because
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education
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 is a key and catch
this
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 key with
ypur
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your
 hand.

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task response
Make your view clear in the first line and keep the same view in all paragraphs.
content
Add one strong example and explain more how it supports your view.
coherence
Use small sentences and add linking words like 'also', 'but', or 'so' to join ideas.
language
Check spelling and fix errors like 'opini on', 'course', 'finish'.
lexical
Use simple words and short phrases; avoid long, hard words.
content
You try to answer the task and show both sides.
structure
There is a start, middle, and end to the essay.
task response
You give a reason that study can help you in job choice.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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  • industry professionals
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  • online courses
  • practical skills
  • job market
  • hands-on experience
  • problem-solving abilities
  • financially burdensome
  • student debt
  • cost-effective
  • transition to employment
  • technology and digital platforms
  • democratized access
  • self-study
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