The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The figure
illustates
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illustrates
how bamboo fabric is made by steps, which includes 9 processes to tell readers the method.
According to
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the picture, the clothes are made from the fabric that
made
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is made
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of bamboo in the very beginning.
Firstly
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, bamboo
have
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has
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to be planted in
Spring
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the Spring
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then
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and then
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harvested in
Fall
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the Fall
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by farmers. After collecting them, they are sent to be cut into strips
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then
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, then
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to be
crused
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crushed
into the form of liquid pulp. In the next stage, it
called
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is called
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Filter
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the Filter
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, which
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stage, which
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means that long fibres need to be
aparted
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separated
from the liquid through filters.
Then
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, in the sixth step, the fibres
go to mix
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are mixed
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with water and amine oxide to make them soft. Since the process of
soften
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softening
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fibres
gets
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is
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done, they can be
spinned
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spun
to produce
as
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apply
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yarns like balls.
Next,
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the yarns become weaves
due to
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they
turns
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turn
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into fabric. In the end, the products of clothes are finished to sell.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • bamboo
  • fabric
  • cloth
  • fiber
  • yarn
  • thread
  • weave
  • knit
  • stages
  • steps
  • process
  • harvest
  • cut
  • crush
  • break
  • fiber
  • spin
  • weave
  • finish
  • wash
  • dye
  • color
  • soft
  • strong
  • material
  • final
  • make
  • from
  • to
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