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The map show a change of coastal town, called Petland, from 1950 to 2007

The maps
illustrates
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 the development made in Petland between 1950 to 2007.
Overall
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, the industrial
domainating
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dominating
 area is
coverted
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converted
 to a resident-friendly
town
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. The location of
car
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the car
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 park is
also
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 changed to meet the demands. In
sea
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the sea
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 that was present to
north
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the north
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 in 1950,
was
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it was
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 turned into a
yatch
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yacht
 marina in 2007, with a
road
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 connecting the
town
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 to the coastal band. The most
noticable
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noticeable
 change was brought to the west of the region. A small portion of the
land
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 used for industrial purposes in 1950
were
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was
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 demolished and replaced by a swimming pool, a multi-storied car park with a dedicated
land
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 for recreational purposes along
woth
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with
 several shops
nearthe
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near the
 connecting
road
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. Towards the south-west, the greenlands present in the early days
,
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 had a cinema built
along with
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 a store in 2007. The most
dranmatic
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dramatic
 change was brought to the east of the region. The car park used in 1950 was deconstructed to continue the
road
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 ahead.
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, the
previosely
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previously
 empty green plot
,
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 had around 10 houses
contructed
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constructed
, changing it into a residential area. The other empty
land
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 just north
to
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of
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 the
residencies
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residences
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,
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 had
additional
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an additional
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 three established
and
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shops built on either side of the
road
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 running horizontally
accross
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across
 the
town
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. In conclusion, the unpopulated barren
land
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 was
turened
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turned
 into a fully
functionally
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functional
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 residential area with numerous amenities,
thus
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coverting
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converting
 it into a city from a
town
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, road, land with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • coast
  • beach
  • town
  • harbor
  • road
  • house
  • houses
  • shop
  • shops
  • park
  • field
  • farm
  • water
  • map
  • year
  • grow
  • build
  • built
  • change
  • expand
  • develop
  • replace
  • new
  • old
  • more
  • less
  • along
  • near
  • center
  • edge
  • fishing
  • tourists
  • people
  • area
  • land
  • sea
  • bay
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