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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a big city compared to living in a small town or village

The selection of residence is regarded as one of the most vital and challenging
decision
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 in contemporary society.
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, living in a big,
modernized
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 city may be costly for some individuals
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 I believe the location near the natural environment is a positive and healthy asset.
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 essay shows a clear bias toward living in a village among nature and
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 the advantages and disadvantages of
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 topic. Some
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nowadays
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 mature individuals claim
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apply
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 that living in a big city satisfies their needs. From my point of view, it has a prominent effect, which is regarded as the main factor in determining the location. The other factor worth mentioning is the availability of shops,
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 as many external people claim
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 are off beat expensive.
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, the others firmly turn down the offer, regardless unique buildings, in terms of
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 nature in cities. The residence in
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an urban
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 area is unfortunately costly, in terms of living. Daily, essential products
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 as food, beverages or personal care items are not something society could get rid of. In my
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 for some population it might not be possible to survive, because of their salaries.
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,
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lower
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 costs of living occur near the natural environment, around rural surroundings, which
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 may have a positive influence
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 our mental health or stress.
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, living in a big city compared to living in a small town or village is demanding
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however
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, I believe that
natural
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the natural
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 environment is significantly more preferable in terms of costs of living, or even stress reduction. The advantages outweigh the disadvantages of
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 topic.

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task
State a clear view and give balance. Say which option you think is best and give 2 or 3 strong reasons for it.
structure
Use a clear plan. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple words and connect with linking phrases such as but, also, so.
language
Keep to simple words. Use short sentences and check spellings.
content
Give more examples and explain why costs or stress change for people.
content
Your stance is clear toward village.
structure
There is a closing with 'To sum up' that links to the topic.
content
Cost and stress are mentioned as key points.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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