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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with prediction from 2030 adn 2040.

The graph demonstrates the proportion of the population
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living in cities among four Asia nations between 1970 and
prediction
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the prediction
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 of 2040.
Overall
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,
Malayia
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Malaysia
 is predicted to
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have the
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 highest growth,
while
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 Thailand is estimated
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to have the
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 least progress in population.
According to
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 the chart, Malaysia started at 30% in 1970 and
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 was erratic at more than 40% in 1990.
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, it expressed a stable increase in 2020 and will climb
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peak above 80% in 2040.
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 soared from a bit higher 30% to almost 50% in
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the first
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 20 years, but it experienced a consistent drop to 40%
at
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in
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 2010. It is predicted to go up in the late
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20s
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.
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, Indonesia revealed a steady growth from more than 10% to 50% in 2020 and
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foresees
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to
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continuing to
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continue developing
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 60% in 2020.
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,Thailand
beginned
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began
 at lower than 20%,
then
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 showed
gradual
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a gradual
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 increase to barely 30%. After that, it
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slowly grew in the late 20 years. Eventually, Thailand is projected to skyrocket
at
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to
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 barely 50% in 2040.

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