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Writing Samples
Band 1

You recently received a message from youth center. The manager asked students what equipment should we use? What space should be created? Should we create areas for gaming and relaxing? How can we make it more welcoming? Write a short note to your friend, who is also a member of the youth center. Tell them how you feel about the center and what improvements you think the youth center needs Write about 50 words.

Hi Dilorom Did you hear what’s going on? It made me feel quite disappointed. I think they should take action because students don’t enjoy spending time there.
Also
Linking Words
, it would be nicer if they could deal with it properly, since adding
game
Correct article usage
a game
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consoler
Use the right word
console
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, a quiet relaxing area, comfortable seating and more sports equipment would make it more welcoming. Speak to you soon John

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planning
Plan the note: start with a greeting, then the main idea, then two or three ideas, and finish with a short close.
grammar
Fix small errors like 'game consoler' to 'game console' and check spacing and punctuation.
cohesion
Use small links such as also, and, but to show how ideas fit with each other.
content
Make each idea clear and say how it helps the center be better.
tone
The note shows care for the center and a wish to make it better.
content
It gives clear examples of what to add (game area, rest space, seating, sports gear).
convention
It keeps a friendly tone with a 'Hi' and 'Speak soon' close.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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