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Writing Samples
Band 2

The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today.

The maps below illustrate the reconstruction of a
farm
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 side between 1950 and the present day.
Overall
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, the old countryside layout consisted
of solely
Correct word order
solely of
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farm
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 and plantation
area
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areas
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,
whereas
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 it is more
tourists friendly
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tourist-friendly
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 nowadays. A big change is visible
on
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in
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 the eastern area where a wide sheep pen was located. It was demolished and replaced by camping grounds and solar panels with two separate parking areas. The track that used to separate the east and west
field
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fields
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 is now transformed into a road, leading to a barn to the south. The big road on the northwest side of the map and the river around the
farm
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remains
Correct subject-verb agreement
remain
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 unchanged.
Similarly
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, the farmhouse and
chickens
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chicken
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 field on the southeast,
as well as
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 the agriculture section to the east
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also
Punctuation problem
, also
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 underwent a minimal alteration, except for the newly built
farm
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 shop
on
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in
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 the fruit trees area.
However
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, the barn on the west was replaced by holiday cottages.

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task
Task Response: You list changes, but some points are not clear or exact. Add a short view at the start and a short wrap at end to show all main changes clearly.
coherence
content
You name many changes, like the sheep pen turning into camping grounds and solar panels.
structure
You show where each area lies and how it changes, which helps the map task.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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