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With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered as they lose their habitat and some are even threatened to the point of extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animal? What measures can be taken to deal with this problem?

In today's society, it has become
common
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occurence
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occurrence
 that
animals
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put
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are put
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 into
thge
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the
 red book.
Due to
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 ever-growing
urbanization
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urbanisation
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which
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, which
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 took
majority
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the majority
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 of the
responsible
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of
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for
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deforestion
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deforestation
.
Furtheremore
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Furthermore
, there has been
trending
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 problem
which
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, which
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 is illegal hunting, that reason
of
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for
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 wildlife extinction. I strongly agree that
animals
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 must be protected
in
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to
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 some degree.
To begin
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 with,
animals
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 are
integral
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an integral
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 part of nature.
Wild-life
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Wildlife
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 proved essential life support for humans
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such
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, such
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 as new medical
breakthrough
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breakthroughs
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 and research.
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, the Atlantic horseshoe crab has saved countless lives through its unique blue blood, which contains a clotting agent used to test the purity of medical equipment and pharmaceutical drugs.
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, compounds from certain frogs are being researched for treating depression, seizures, and memory loss. There are more
instance
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instances
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 than these
example
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examples
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. One of the closest is probably a pet, which
proved
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provides
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 emotional support to medical services that
human
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humans
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 cannot feel
on
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at
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right
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the right
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 time. But one of the biggest
problem
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problems
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,
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apply
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that
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is illegal hunting. Which had taken most of the wildlife. To confront these issues,
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the goverment
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goverment
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government
 must put tighter restrictions and
more stricted
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stricter
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law
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laws
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. For
starter
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starters
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, they can force wrongful hunters
pay
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to pay
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 high fines, or cease
their
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using their
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weapon
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weapons
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 and traps. It could prevent furtheremore, of
the
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apply
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poaching.
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, most of the environmental issues
started
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stem
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 from poachers. Suffice it to say, human activities can
make
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cause
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 unimaginable harm
for
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to
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animals
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. It causes numerous negative
impact
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impacts
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for
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on
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surroundings
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the surroundings
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. But there is still a chance to change that damage. Started by saving
animals
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 that lived in
wild
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the wild
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.

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task development
Plan your answer first. State your view clearly in the first line, then give 2 or 3 clear points to support it.
coherence
Use one main idea per paragraph with a clear topic sentence.
grammar
Use simpler grammar and check spellings. Fix common errors like 'deforestation' and 'government'.
style
Keep to short, clear sentences and use simple words from the top 100. Do not make long, hard lines.
purpose
The essay shows a clear view that animals should be protected.
content
Some links are made between human life and animals.
evidence
Examples are given to support points.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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