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The table below shows the sales made by a coffee shop in an office building on a typical weekday. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates the total number of items sold in a
coffee
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 shop located in an office building during a typical weekday.
Sales
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 are divided into four time periods: 7:30- 10:30, 10:30- 14:30, 14:30 - 17:30, and 17:30 - 20:30, and include
coffee
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, tea, pastries, and sandwiches.
Overall
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, the early morning
period
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 recorded the highest number of
sales
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,
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, the afternoon
period
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 had the lowest.
Coffee
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 was the most popular item throughout the day,
whereas
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 tea was the least consumed. Among food items, pastries were more frequently purched than sandwiches. In the first time slot, from 7:30 to 10:30, the
coffee
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 shop sold a total of 700 items, making it the busiest
period
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 of the day.
This
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 was followed by the late morning to early afternoon
period
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 (10:30 -14:30), with 530
sales
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. The evening
period
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 (17:30 - 20:30_ saw 465 orders,
while
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 the afternoon
period
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( 14:30- 17:30) had the lowest figure at 370. Regarding individual products,
coffee
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 was the best-selling item, with total 795 order across the four
period
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. Pastries ranked seconed with 600
sales
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, followed by sandwiches at 400. Tea was the least popular item, with only 270 orders throughout the day.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, sales, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • peak hours
  • trough in sales
  • high consumer demand
  • lunchtime surge
  • light meals
  • caffeine boost
  • sustained interest
  • fluctuate
  • comparison of products
  • typical weekday
  • busiest period
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