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The charts Below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the word. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons were relevant.

The charts illustrate information about the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the
word
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world
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.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that Agricultural
use
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 was the highest
values
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value
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,
while
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 domestic
use
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 recorded the lowest figures across the countries. There were
also
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 noticeable differences between individual
use
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.
Looked
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Looking
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 at the chart, it can be found that the highest percentage of
Agricultural
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agriculture
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 was for Central
Asia
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 and Africa at 88% and 84%.
This
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 was followed by South East
Asia
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 and South
America
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which
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 accounted for 81% and 71% respectively. Meanwhile, the lowest proportion in
this
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 category was recorded in North
America
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 and Europe at 39% and 32%. Regarding industrial
use
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, the greatest figure was reported in Europe and North
America
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 at 53% and 48%. The second and third highest values came from South East
Asia
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 and South
America
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, which stood at 12% and 10%.
In contrast
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, the lowest proportion
to
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is to
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 Africa and Central
Asia
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 at 7% and 5%. As for Domestic
use
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 , South
America
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 and Europe had the highest percentages at 19% and 15%. The next most significant value
were
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was
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 seen in North
America
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 and Africa, which recorded 13% and 9% respectively .
Finally
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,the smallest figure in
this
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 category was observed in Central
Asia
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 and South East
Asia
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 at 7% in both countries.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 80%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words use, asia, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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