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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transport in the Uk between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and makecomparisons where relevant.

The line chart illustrates the amount of goods transport by four
type
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types
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modes
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 of transport in the UK from 1974 to 2002.
Overall
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, the roads, water, and pipeline showed an upward trend,
whereas
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 the rail experienced fluctuation over time. In 1974, the quantities of pipeline began at around 8
million
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 tonnes, which was followed by a moderate growth to over 20
million
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in
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 1994.
This
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 figure remained stable in the remaining years.
Moreover
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, the amount of goods from water accounted for nearly 40
million
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 in the first year, and
thereafter
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 edged up to 40
million
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 in the following years. After rising to approximately 55
million
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, the figure increased slightly to almost 60
million
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 in 1986 and remained unchanged until 1992.
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 the share dropped to about 52
million
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, it recovered to above 60
million
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 tonnes
at the end
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 of the period.
Furthermore
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, the road quantities started at 70
million
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,
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it
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 inched up by around 3
million
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. Before increasing to over 80
million
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, the value dipped to 68
million
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.
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 was followed by a slight fall to 79
million
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 in 1994, and
thereafter
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 it soared to almost 100
million
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 by 2002.
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, the number of rail goods recorded 40
million
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 in 1970, and thereby fell to 30
million
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. The share rose by 5
million
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 and remained the same in the following years. Before soaring to over 40
million
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 in 2002, the quantities crashed to below 30
million
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "thereafter".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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