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The chart below gives information about "Instanbul Promo Plus" sales in 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given time graph provides information about "Istanbul Promo Plus"
sales
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 in 2007. As
overall
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 trends, the
sales
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was
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were
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 fluctuating over
a
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the
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 year. March had the highest
number
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 of
sales
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 (350
million
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 Turkish Lira),
whereas
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 July and September received the lowest
number
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 (120
million
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). It is interesting to note that both July and September showed a similar profile. At the beginning of January, the
number
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 of
sales
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 moved upward from 200 to 250 (in millions) in February, and climbed to a peak in March.
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, a constant decline
happened
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occurred
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 with a reduction of 50
million
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 per month until July hit the lowest
number
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 of 120
million
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. The
sales
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 went up again to 210
million
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 in August , but it did not
last
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 long. The
number
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 of
sales
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 fell in September, and slightly increased by 50 points in October. It levelled out until November,
then
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 grew to 170
million
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 Turkish Lira
at the end
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 of the year.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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