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Band 5

The chart shows the total distance travelled by passengers on five types of transport in the UK between 1990-2000.

The bar chart illustrates
whole
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the whole
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 distance travelled by people on five means of transportation in the UK from 1990 to 2000. Looking
from
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at
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Linking Words
overall
Correct article usage
the overall
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 structure,
total
Correct article usage
the total
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 distance travelled by buses and trains is
in
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at
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the
Correct pronoun usage
its
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 highest position
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whereas
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, whereas
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 other transportation systems experienced a decline in the UK during the time frame. Moving
onto
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on to
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 the remaining statistics, the rate of
kilometers
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kilometres
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 travelled by bus and train accounted for nearly 50km in 2000,
while
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 it decreased slightly to 47km in 1990. The
amount
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number
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 of
kilometers
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kilometres
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 travelled by bicycle and motorbike experienced approximately 10 in 1990,
whereas
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 it declined in 1990. As
regard
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regards
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 travelling by plane was the lowest one
which
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, which
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 amounted to almost 8 in
1990
Punctuation problem
1990,
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while
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 it dropped in 2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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