Governments should spend less money on restoring old buildings and more money for new housing and roads development. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is an ongoing debate on
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ways of spending government funds for infrastructure. Some people believe that the government should
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their investments
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road
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roads
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and housing developments, rather than renovating old
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. In my opinion, I firmly agree with
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argument because it improves public safety and reduces significant issues
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as congestion and housing needs.
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of new roads
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better safety and convenience to the public.
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is primarily because new pathways provide access to alternative routes to the same destination,
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preventing overcrowding on a single congested road.
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a measure not only
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people to save their time, but
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helps to reduce traffic,
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 enhancing
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public safety.
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, a recent survey revealed that 80% of traffic accidents are prevented in France after the construction of
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road system.
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, more investment
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sector improves the
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wellness of the society. Moving
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, new housing developments
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the living standards of the community. As they have more access to housing options, many individuals prefer to own a place
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than
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renting
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in small apartments or condos, which improves their style and quality of living.
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, in 2022, Canada
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started their new housing projects, which
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significantly reduced the homelessness issue faced by their
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. In conclusion,
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renovating old architectures helps to maintain our heritage and attracts more income through
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tourism
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it is not
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vital as addressing the immediate issues faced by the community. I strongly believe that officials must invest more funds
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roads and housing for the
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well-being of society.

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task
Be clear in your view. State your side at the start, then add two solid reasons with examples. Try to show some view about other ideas too, even briefly.
coherence
Make the flow of ideas smooth. Use easy linking words like First, Next, Also, But, However, In addition. Check that each sentence matches the verb and noun in number.
strength
Clear stance is shown in the opening and is restated in the ending.
strength
There is a simple, clear structure: intro, two body paragraphs, conclusion.
strength
Some examples are used to support points.
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