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The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014.

The given bar chart illustrates the percentage of unemployed women in the UK over a year, from 2013 to 2014
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 as time went by, the rate of unemployment among women decreased in the UK, the opposite trend could be seen in Scotland. In 2013, the percentage of women who were not employed was 6.8% and 6.1% in England and Scotland, respectively, which were higher compared to other cities. These figures for Wales and Northern Ireland were 5.4% and 5.6%, respectively. In 2014,
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 there was a decline in female unemployment rates in England, Wales, and Northern Ireland,
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 trend in Scotland was opposite, which reached at 6.7% in
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 year.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unemployment rates
  • female unemployment
  • data representation
  • overall trend
  • disparities
  • regional differences
  • insight
  • analysis
  • significant changes
  • employment policies
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