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IETLS Writing Test - The line graph shows thefts per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the information about the theft of
car
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cars
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vehicles
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in nine years in four different countries between 1990 and 1999. During the entire duration,
it is clear that
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 Great Britain was the only country which
has
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had
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 the culmination in car
stealing
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theft in
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 1990,
approximetaly
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approximately
 17000. The other countries
except
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, except
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Sweden
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Sweden,
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 plummeted their ratio after 1995. Upon close examination of data, it was revealed that in Great
Britain
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Britain,
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 the car
stealing
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theft
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 trend fluctuated till 1997,
afterwards
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and afterwards
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 it started declining. In France, the ratio commenced eroding over the years till 1999. Canada has experienced the
auto-mobile
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automobile
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 stealing, but its proportion almost remained the same with
minorly
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a minorly
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increaed
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increase
. Eventually, Sweden had
prolonged
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a prolonged
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 escalation till 1999.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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