Some feel that cities should be designed to be beautiful while others feel their functionality is more important. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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can be beautiful and
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many jobs. The question is, some people believe
cities
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must be beautiful
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other people
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believe
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economy
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more essential than beauty. In my opinion, I believe
cities
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can
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on their beauty
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also
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and also
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their
econmics
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economy
. In
this
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essay, we are going to discuss both views and give
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opinion. First of all,
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cities
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beautiful
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are beautiful
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but without strong
econmic
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economic
development
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is
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are
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unsustainable
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apply
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cities
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.
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, we have to create
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a balance
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between
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the
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beautiy
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beauty
of the
cities
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and focusing on economic
development
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. In
therms
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of the beauty of
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, we should
buld
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build
parks around the
cities
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, in
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additional
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we should encourage the community to plant the trees in their home.
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, we should build public spaces and
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garden spaces to help the community
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meditate, because meditation helps to reduce stress and improve mental health.
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,
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the
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apply
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Saudi Arabia, we are
building
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planting
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a million
of
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trees and
build
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building
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parks around the
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also
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we are building the biggest park in the world.
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,
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we are focusing on the
beautiy
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beauty
of
cities
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, we should
also
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give attention to the economic
development
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.
we
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We
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should invest in our
commuinity
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community
education to create
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a learned
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generation. In
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additional
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additional,
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we should
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foreign companies to open a branch in our country,
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which
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can help to create thousands of jobs.
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,
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UAE
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the UAE
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,
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they
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invested around 5
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million
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in their community education
,
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.
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, they invited 12 international companies to open a
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branch
in
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the UAE
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. As
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of
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, they created more than
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jobs. In the conclusion, I would argue that creating
balace
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balance
between the
beautiy
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beauty
of
cities
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and strong economic
development
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is essential. Kim You

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • city
  • design
  • beauty
  • function
  • side
  • people
  • life
  • home
  • work
  • plan
  • transport
  • road
  • street
  • park
  • garden
  • tree
  • color
  • light
  • art
  • clean
  • safe
  • air
  • water
  • waste
  • cost
  • price
  • build
  • housing
  • job
  • service
  • cycle
  • walk
  • car
  • bus
  • train
  • speed
  • easy
  • hard
  • big
  • small
  • modern
  • old
  • idea
  • point
  • problem
  • solution
  • improve
  • balance
  • future
  • choice
  • option
  • together
  • planning
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