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Band 3.5

Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore, every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

One of the fundamental human needs is a drinkable and clean
water
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 accessibility.
This
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 essay argues that it is important for everyone to
access
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 a free
water
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 supply, especially because basic human rights
fulfillment
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fulfilment
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 is the government's responsibility
and
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, and
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 inaccessible clean
water
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 can lead to
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a numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of diseases.
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,
government
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the government
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 is responsible for ensuring equal
access
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 to clean
water
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. If citizens are obligated to pay for a
water
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 supply, many people will be deprived of clean
water
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due to
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 poverty.
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, the basic human
rights' fulfillment
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rights
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 of
significant
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a significant
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amout
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number
 of people will not be achieved as the authorities fail to ensure the
accesibility
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accessibility
 of drinkable
water
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.
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, as we acknowledged that many people might not be able to have
access
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 to a paid clean
water
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,
scarcity
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the scarcity
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 problem will arise, which indirectly leads to
transmittable
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transmissible
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 diseases.
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,
due to
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 the
monetization
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 of pure
water
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, the
lower income
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 households are more likely to
access
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 impure
water
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.
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, they are prone to
suffer
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 from skin problems and
diarrhea
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diarrhoea
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.
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, a paid scheme for clean
water
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 supply can lead to a deteriorating public health situation. In summary, it is crucial to ensure free
access
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of
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to
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 drinkable
water
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 to every part of
the
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apply
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society.
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, the authorities need to
fulfill
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fulfil
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its
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their
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 duty to provide free
water
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 for their citizens. Ultimately,
monetization
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monetisation
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 of
water
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 supply can lead to
inaccessiblilty
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inaccessibility
 for the financially
challanged
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challenged
 communities and
putting
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put
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 them
in
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at
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 high risk of suffering
transmittable
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transmissible
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 diseases.

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Make a clear plan at the start and keep to it. State your view in one line.
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Give more real proof or strong ideas for each point. Use simple examples that the reader can see.
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Fix small spell and word errors and use only common words.
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Use linking words to show how ideas are linked, so flow is smooth.
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Keep one idea in each paragraph and write a short end to each part.
strength
The writer makes a clear view that clean water should be free.
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The essay has a plan and a conclusion.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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