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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the weekly
consumption
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 of
fish
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 and three types of meat (
beef
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,
lamb
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, and
chicken
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) in a European country over a 25-year period from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
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, the
consumption
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 of
chicken
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 saw a significant upward trend, becoming the most popular choice by the end of the period.
In contrast
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, the figures for
beef
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,
lamb
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, and
fish
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 all experienced varying degrees of decline. In 1979,
beef
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 was the most consumed meat, starting at
approxiately
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approximately
 220
grams
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 per person per week.
This
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 was followed by
lamb
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 and
chicken
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 at around 150
grams
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 and 140
grams
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respectively
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,
while
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fish
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 remained the least preferred at just over 50
grams
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. Between 1979 and 2004,
chicken
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consumption
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 underwent a dramatic rise, despite some minor fluctuations. It overtook
beef
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 in 1989 and continued to climb, peaking at 250
grams
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 in 2002 before finishing at roughly 240
grams
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.
Conversely
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, the popularity of
beef
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 plummeted, dropping to around 100
grams
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 by 2004, even though it had some temporary recoveries in the early 1980s.
Similarly
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, the
consumption
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 of
lamb
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 decreased steadily, falling from 150
grams
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 to approximately 60
grams
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 by the end of the period.
Fish
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consumption
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 remained relatively stable but showed a slight downward trend, consistently staying below 50
grams
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 throughout the entire timeframe.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words consumption, fish, beef, lamb, chicken, grams with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • metric tons
  • fluctuations
  • upward/downward trend
  • stabilize
  • peak
  • trough
  • overtake
  • steady decline/increase
  • sustainable
  • dietary habits
  • preferences
  • health consciousness
  • per capita
  • poultry
  • veal
  • stagnant
  • gradual
  • surpass
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