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Band 5.5

The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows
average
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the average
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of
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apply
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annually
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annual
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expenditure
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 on cell
phone
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 and residential
phone
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services
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 from 2001 until 2010.
Overall
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, the highest
expenditure
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 in 2001 was residential
phone
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services
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,
while
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 in 2010, cell
phone
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services
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 had the highest
number
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expenditure
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. The residential
phone
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services
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 dropped steadily
year
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 after
year
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,
while
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 cellphone
services
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 increased rapidly. In
the
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apply
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2001, residential
phone
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services
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was
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were
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in
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at
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the
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their
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 highest expenditures
with
Punctuation problem
, with
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 the price per
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services
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service
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was
Verb problem
apply
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sky rocketing
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skyrocketing
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,
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.
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that
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apply
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until
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Until
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 the residential
phone
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 was got dropped
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a steadily
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steadily
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steady
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year
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decline year
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 after
year
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until
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apply
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the residential
phone
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services
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 was got
the
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their
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 lowest fee in
the
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apply
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2010
Punctuation problem
2010,
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 with the amount almost 500$ per
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services
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service
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 Meanwhile, cell
phone
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services
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was
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were
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 getting the lowest fee
expenditure
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 in
the
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apply
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2001, and its increased rapidly until
2010
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2010,
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 with
the
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a
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highest
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high
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 of the fee
expenditure
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with
Punctuation problem
, with
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 the amount almost 800$ per
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services
Fix the agreement mistake
service
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, phone, services, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.
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