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Band 3.5

In recent years more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. Do the advantages of ebooks outweigh their disadvantages?

Recently, reading
ebooks
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are
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becoming
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 increasingly popular among people
instead
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 of paper
books
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.
While
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 reading
ebooks
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have
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has
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 many benefits
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such
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 as more available options, it
also
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 brings many drawbacks to human
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, mainly
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health
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.
This
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 essay will argue that the disadvantages of
this
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 outweigh the advantages. The primary disadvantage of reading online
books
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 is the issue of
long lasting
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 impact on human eyes. Reading
ebooks
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require
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requires
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concantration
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concentration
, and
prolong
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 reading on screens can cause eye strain and
headache
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headaches
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. Recent studies found that people who spend
reading
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time reading
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ebooks
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 before bedtime
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suffers
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suffer
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 from insomnia and headaches. Another reason is the lack of
tengible
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tangible
 reading experience. Many
readers
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values
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value
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 the
physcial
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physical
 feel of
books
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such
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 as turning the pages or visually tracking the progress, which can not
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on
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ebooks
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. As a
results
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result
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, they can not enjoy the book and lose interest.
On the other hand
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, one of the main
benefit
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benefits
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 of
ebooks
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 is
convinience
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convenience
 and accessibility.
Readers
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 can store
thousand
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thousands
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 of
books
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 online and can carry them
whereever
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wherever
 they
goes
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go
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. Amazon
ebooks
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,
for instance
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, allows
readers
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 to
story
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store
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 their favourite
books
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 and
acess
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access
 them from any part of the world.
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,
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 these
books
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 are easily accessible,
but
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the
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health related
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health-related
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 drawbacks are far too
greater
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great
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. In conclusion, many
readers
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 are currently
favouritising
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favouring
ebooks
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 because of
its
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their
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accessibilty
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accessibility
 and
convinence
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convenience
.
However
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,
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health related
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health-related
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 issues and lack of
tengble
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tangible
 experience of
ebooks
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outweights
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outweigh
 its
benifits
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benefits
.

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grammar
Fix basic spelling and grammar. Small mistakes like concanntration, tengible, and can not make the work hard to read.
structure
Use one clear plan. Start with a short intro that says what you will argue. Then one paragraph for each key idea. End with a short conclusion.
coherence
Put a clear topic sentence in each paragraph. Keep ideas in order and use simple links like first, also, but, so, therefore.
content
Give more real proof or example for each point. This helps to show your view.
vocabulary
Check the spelling of common word and use plain form. Use words you know well.
content
The essay has a clear view that disadv outweighs adv.
content
There is a plan to talk about two sides.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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