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The graph below shows the percentage of people going to cinemas in one European country on different days. Summerize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the
percentage
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 of individuals going to cinemas in a country in Europe on different days.
Overall
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,
visitors
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 on Saturday made up the largest
percentage
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 . Meanwhile,
visitors
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 on Thursday made up the smallest
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 . In 2007, around 43 per
cent
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 of
visitors
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 visited cinemas
in
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on
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 Saturday. In the same year, the
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 of
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 on Thursday, Wednesday ,and Monday was around 10 per
cent
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. Meanwhile
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 of
visitors
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 on Friday and Sunday was about 30 per
cent
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. In 2005, most
visitors
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 used to go on Saturday with a
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 of 45 per
cent
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. In the same year, the
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 of
visitors
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 on Thursday was the lowest at around 8 per
cent
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. In 2003, the largest
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 of
visitors
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 was on Sunday
with
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 a
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about
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of about
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 32 per
cent
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.
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While the
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The
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 smallest
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 of
visitors
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 in 2003 was on Monday at around 10 per
cent
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, visitors, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 10 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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