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The chart below shows the average price per kilo of clothing imported into the European Union from seven major countries of origin in 1997 and 2003. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given bar chart
illustrate
Correct subject-verb agreement
illustrates
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Use synonyms
price
Correct article usage
the price
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 range of sold
cloths
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clothes
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 from 7 main countries
to
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in
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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Europe from 1997 to 2003.
Overall
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,
It
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it
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 can be seen that
Argentina
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 sold their
cloths
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clothes
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 for
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
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 amount in 1993 compared to other nations
Punctuation problem
. Moreover
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moreover
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, in 2003,
Argentina
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 slightly decreased their
price
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However
Punctuation problem
. However
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,
they
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it
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 remained highest
price
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 during the
period
Punctuation problem
period,
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while
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 Bangladesh
represent
Wrong verb form
represented
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lowest
Correct article usage
the lowest
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 average
price
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 in the beginning and the end of
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the perieod
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perieod
Correct your spelling
period
. In 1993,
Argentina
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 had rapidly
increase
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increased
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 their average
price
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 for 1 kg of
cloths
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clothes
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which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 was around 27
pounds
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 per
a
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apply
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kg
Punctuation problem
kg,
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while
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 Bangladesh
remain
Wrong verb form
remained
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lowest
Correct article usage
the lowest
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which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 was nearly 3
pounds
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 per 1 kg
Punctuation problem
. Moreover
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moreover
Linking Words
, in 2003,
Argentina
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 slightly declined
Punctuation problem
, which
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which
Use the right word
with
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 was nearly 26
pounds
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while
Linking Words
Bandladesh
Correct your spelling
Bangladesh
 dramatically
increase
Wrong verb form
increased
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more
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by more
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 than 5
pounds
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 in the year of 2005. In both
years
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years,
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 Brazil
remain
Wrong verb form
remained
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 steady
which
Punctuation problem
, which
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 was around 23
pounds
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Punctuation problem
. Moreover
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moreover
Linking Words
, China, India and
bandladesh
Correct your spelling
Bangladesh
 slightly
increase
Replace the word
increased
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in
Change preposition
at
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 the end of
period
Correct article usage
the period
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 compared to
the
Correct article usage
apply
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1993.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, argentina, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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