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The given bar chart indicates total spendings on health care as from percentage perspective of GDP in 12 European countries during the years of 2002, 2007 and 2012.

The provided bar chart illustrates expenditure of medical care as from proportion
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of GDP in 12 different
Eurpoe nation
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European
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 countries from the years
of
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2002
,
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 2007 to 2012.
Overall
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,
It
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 can be seen that
both
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Belgium, Switzerland, Estonia and Spain remain stable during the entire time
period
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period,
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while
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 Switzerland
reach
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reached
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 a
the
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peak during the time period
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. Moreover
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moreover
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, Estonia people had
lowest
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the lowest
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 percentage. In
details
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both
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, both
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 France and Switzerland expenses were dramatically increased
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, which
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which
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with
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average
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an average
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 percentage was around 11 in
2007
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2007,
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while
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 Estonia was the lowest during the time period
which
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, which
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is
Wrong verb form
was
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 nearly 3
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. Moreover
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moreover
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, Norway, Poland and Slovenia
were
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incresed
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increased
 their GDP percentage in
2012
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2012,
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while
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,
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 France,Luxembourg and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 had a
dwonfall
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decline
which
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, which
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 was 9, 7 and 8 in 2012.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover, while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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