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The plans below show the site of a farm in 1950 and the same site today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below illustrate the transformation of the
farm
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 site in 1950 and what
happened
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has happened
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in
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at
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 the same site today. In the 1950s, the
farm
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 had a layout that was surrounded by a river. In the middle of a river, the
farm
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 has agriculture,
such
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 as
fruit
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 trees that are near the main road, soft
fruit
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, which is next to the
fruit
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 trees, and vegetables, which are
at the end
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 of the agriculture section.
Furthermore
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, the farms are connected by a track that connects to the main road, which is crucial for a barn, farmhouse, chicken coop, and sheep section. Today, the
farm
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 was having significant changes. The sheep section was involved
into
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in
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 the camping field, parking lot, and solar panel
farm
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. Meanwhile, the barn was
involved
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converted
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to
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into
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 holiday cottages and the original barn was moved
into
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to
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 the southwest of the
farm
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, near the
chickens
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chicken
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 coop. The
fruit
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 tree
now
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has now
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 built a
farm
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 shop
and
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, and
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 in front of
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farm
Correct article usage
the farm
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 shop
also
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 built the main parking lot.
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overall
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Overall
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, the
farm
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 has
getting
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undergone
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 significant changes from 1950
into
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to
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nowdays
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nowadays
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structure
Try to give one clear line at the start that says what the two maps show, and end with a short line that says what changed.
organization
Put ideas in order: first the old map, then the new map, and end with a short compare sentence.
language
Use plain words and name each part well, like barn, coop, and farm shop.
grammar
Keep grammar simple and fix big word mistakes.
content
You show the idea of change from old to new.
content
You name many parts of the farm.
structure
Two time parts are used, which helps the reader.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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