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The digram below gives information about the number of parcels delieverd by two major mail services companies from 1920 to 2000

The line chart illustrates information about the total number of parcels delivered by two major mail service enterprises,
FedEx
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 and TNT, over an 80‑year period from 1920 to 2000.
Overall
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, it is evident from the chart that
FedEx
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 recorded the highest number of parcels delivered during the first half of the period.
In contrast
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, TNT reached its peak toward the end of the timeframe. Regarding
FedEx
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, parcel deliveries began at 15,000 in 1920 and rose steadily to nearly 25,000 by 1940.
This
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 was followed by a sharp decline in the subsequent decade.
However
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, the figure recovered gradually, reaching around 18,000 by the year 2000. In terms of TNT, the number of parcels delivered started at 6,000 in 1920 and
then
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 increased slowly throughout the timeframe. In 1990, the company exceeded
FedEx
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 by more than 20,000 deliveries. After that,
this
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 figure reached a peak of almost 25,000 in 2000.

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Task response: you give a good overall view and some detail, but some data do not stay true to the chart. Make sure all facts come from the chart. If a point cannot be seen on the chart, skip it. Use clear numbers from the chart and end with a short sum up.
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Coherence and cohesion: group the steps well. Use one part for FedEx and one for TNT, and add an intro and a short end. Use linking words to show order, like first, then, after that, and in contrast. Keep the idea in each paragraph clear and check that the flow goes in a straight line from start to end.
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Clear start with what the chart shows.
content
Overall view is given and numbers are used.
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