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The diagrams below show the layout of a library five years ago and the current plan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map
show
Correct subject-verb agreement
shows
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 the
library
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 model five years ago and the current plan.
Overall
Linking Words
, in the
library
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 removed one
room
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and
Verb problem
was removed and
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added
Verb problem
apply
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two new.
S et
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Set
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 up new tables in the
middle
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.
Also
Linking Words
, changed
Correct article usage
the name
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name
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names
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 of
rooms
Correct article usage
the rooms
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.  5 years ago
in
Punctuation problem
, in
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 the
libraryvat
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library, on
 the left
side
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bottom
Punctuation problem
, bottom
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there
Punctuation problem
, there
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 were three rooms
:
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:
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classroom
Correct article usage
a classroom
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,
recording
Correct article usage
a recording
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room
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, borrowing and returning desk. At the top and at the
bottom&nbsp
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bottom
;
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,
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in the
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middle
Add a comma
middle,
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 there were
book shelves
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bookshelves
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 and in the
middle
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 four
studying
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study
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 tables.
At
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On
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 the right
side
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from
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of
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a
Correct article usage
the
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wall
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wall,
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 there was
desk
Correct article usage
a desk
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 for computers. In the bottom
library
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 office.  In
current
Correct article usage
the current
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plan
Add a comma
plan,
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 there are several changes.
In
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On
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 the left
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side
Punctuation problem
side,
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 removed recording
room
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, added
Verb problem
was removed, added
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 recording studio and
seperated
Correct your spelling
the
 borrowing and returning desks
.
Verb problem
were separated.
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 In the
middle
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 added two tables
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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 it becomes private.
Also
Linking Words
,
in
Change preposition
apply
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the bottom desks
Verb problem
were
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changed to
desk
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desks
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 for student laptops.
Right
Correct article usage
The right
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side
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fully
Verb problem
has fully
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 changed names. The computer desks now provide laptops
and
Punctuation problem
, and
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library
Correct article usage
the library
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 office
changed
Verb problem
has been changed
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 to
conference
Correct article usage
a conference
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room
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. 

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room, middle, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 5 times.
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