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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that learning about the past is an important topic in modern life.
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 some
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 believe that studying the past has no value for
people
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 living in the present, I strongly disagree with
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 view and believe that learning about the past is essential for today’s society.
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 with, learning about the past helps
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 gain valuable knowledge and experience. By studying history, individuals can understand past mistakes and successes, which helps them make better decisions in the present and future.
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, many problems in society today,
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 as economic crises or conflicts, have happened before, and learning about them can help governments and individuals avoid repeating the same mistakes. Another important point is that without the past, there would be no progress today. Most of the technologies and comforts we enjoy now,
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 as electricity, transportation, and modern medicine, exist because of discoveries and inventions made in the past.
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, learning about history helps
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 understand different cultures and traditions, which improves communication and cooperation between nations in the present. In conclusion,
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 some
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 think that learning about the past has no value, I firmly believe that it plays a crucial role in our lives. Studying history increases knowledge, supports development, and helps
people
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 build a better future.

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Your view is clear and you follow the task. To make it easier to see, add one more strong example.
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Link work is good. Each part moves in a steady way. Try to keep one idea per paragraph and use more link words between ideas.
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Check small mistakes in spell and grammar to keep good sense.
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Clear position and easy to read; you state your view well from the start.
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Good use of sign posts like To begin with and In conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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