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Writing Samples
Band 4

The average number of hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart illustrates a comparison of hours spent yearly on teaching by tutors in Japan, Spain, Ireland and
USA
Correct article usage
the USA
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 in 2001.
Overall
Linking Words
, educators in Japan, Spain, Ireland and the United States dedicated most of their time teaching (lower secondary and upper secondary), and spent
fewer
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less
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 time with the primary students. -
While
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, upper secondary constantly key features. upper secondary school was the most taught.
lower
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Lower
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 secondary becomes the second most taught.

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planning
Your answer should have a short plan: intro, 2-3 body parts, and a short end.
overview
State the overall trend in one sentence.
content indicators
Give 2-3 main features from the chart and compare the four countries clearly.
grammar
Use simple and correct grammar; avoid long phrases.
Strength
You state the topic well by using 'The bar chart illustrates'
Strength
You mention all four countries
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual hours of teaching
  • teaching workload
  • educational systems
  • teacher-student ratio
  • significantly
  • slightly
  • noticeably
  • gap
  • highest/lowest number of hours
  • compare
  • contrast
  • reflect
  • variations
  • distribution of teaching hours
  • average
  • respectively
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