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Many governments invest a great deal of money in spack reasearch. What are the advantages and potential disadvantages of spending money on space exploration?

Space
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research
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 is one of the most acknowledged topics by the
nations
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 worldwide.
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 amount of money
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this
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 subject can offer advantages
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 as increased global reputation and contribution
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future
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 scientific
development
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, it can cause disadvantages like negligence towards other important sectors and increased financial burden. One of the notable advantages of funding
space
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research
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 is
increased
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an increased
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 reputation worldwide. If a
country
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 carries out a
space
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 mission which was not performed previously, the news will widely spread across
nations
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 through
media
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the media
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 and
press
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the press
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 .
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, the
country
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 will gain fame and honour from its fellow
nations
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 for taking
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 crucial action.
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, the information or knowledge discovered through
space
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research
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 can be crucial for
future
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research
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 and
development
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.
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,conducting
research
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 on outer
space
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 or
space
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 travel can help
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scientists gain detailed knowledge and gather evidence about the weather and conditions in outer
space
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which
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, which
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 can
beneficial
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be beneficial
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 for making alterations or improvements in the technologies
desgined
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designed
 for
future
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 use.
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,researchers can make changes in the spaceship that will
launched
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 in
future
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, by using the information gathered through previous
space
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 studies.
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 there are several advantages of
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 investment, certain disadvantages
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 exist. Funding
space
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research
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 can
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 to negligence towards other important sectors. If a developing nation with limited financial resources spends a lot of money on
space
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 exploration, it will have no funds saved for
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development
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the development
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 of other important departments that require immediate attention.
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, many countries struggle with
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transport and education system problems
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lack
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a lack
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 of funds ,which are a crucial part
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involved
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country's
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a country's
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development
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.
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,
this
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 problem can significantly increase the
country
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's financial burden. Many countries with less economic backup for performing
space
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research
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 take loans from other well-developed
nations
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.
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, if the
space
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 studies do not
perfrom
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perform
 well, the countries will be under huge financial debts. In conclusion, investing money
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space
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research
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 offers benefits
such
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 as increased popularity worldwide and provides
remarkable
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a remarkable
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 contribution
in
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to
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future
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research
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.
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, the drawbacks of
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trend
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that
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which
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are
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include
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 decreased attention towards other domains and
rise
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a rise
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 in financial
issues
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issues,
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 can not be neglected.

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task response
The essay shows both sides, but there is no very clear final line or strong view. Add a clear stance in the end.
task response
Give more clear and strong examples to back each point.
coherence
Make every paragraph have one clear idea and a simple topic sentence.
coherence
Use simple linking words to move ideas, and keep sentences short.
structure
Good layout: intro, two body parts (pros and cons), and a short conclusion.
content
The essay tries to cover both sides and ends with a notice.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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