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Band 6

The given diagram indicates information about how used glass bottles are recycled.

Recycling is important in today’s world. It is good for
environment
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the environment
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 since we
making
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are making
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 new products
form
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from
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 the old products
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for
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, for
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 example, the provided flow chart illustrates the recycling process of waste
glass
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bottles
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.
Overall
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,
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it
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It is clear that
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 there are three main stages
are
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apply
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shows
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shown
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on
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in
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 the processes. The beginning with
collection
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the collection
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 of
wasted
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waste
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bottle
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bottles
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 after
used
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use
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,
then
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 liquid
glass
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, and the ending new
bottles
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production
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apply
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.
At the first stage
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 in the process is gathered of unused
glass
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bottles
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at
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are gathered at
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 a collecting point. And delivered to
cleaning
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the cleaning
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 unit by vehicle. At the second stage
glass
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bottles
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 of waste, they are washed by high-pressure water before separated
according to
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 their are especially colors clear, green, brown with important because the different colors are made
due to
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 many different substances that are added ideally green
glass
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 will be recycle into Green
Glass
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 and brown
glass
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 into Brown
Glass
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,
thereafter
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, it sent to
glass
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 factory, where made
bottles
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 broken into
glass
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 pieces.
This
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 process
give
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gives
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 heat burning in
furnace
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a furnace
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 at
the
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a
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 temperature
600
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of 600
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 Celsius degree to 800 Celsius
degree
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degrees
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and
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, and
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get
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what is
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 produced
was
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is
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 liquid
glass
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and
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. and
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gathered
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gather
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 new
glass
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 liquid
form
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from
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 other
method
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methods
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and
Punctuation problem
, and
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then
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 they
into
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apply
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the shaped in a
glass
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 mould to
new
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produce new
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bottles
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 of produce. At
Final
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the Final
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 stage, the new
bottles
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produce
Wrong verb form
produced
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,
Punctuation problem
apply
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they
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apply
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are delivered to supermarkets, where new
glass
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bottles
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 are put on sale and reused by consumers,
thus
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 completing the recycling of waste
glass
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bottles
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words glass, bottles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Recycling
  • Glass bottles
  • Collection
  • Sorting
  • Contaminants
  • Cleaning process
  • Crushing
  • Melting
  • Formation
  • Environmental benefits
  • Energy conservation
  • Landfill
  • Consumer participation
  • Sustainable practices
  • Recycled material
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