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Band 4

Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this ot only improves their health but also benefits the world. Discuss this viewpoint and give your own opinion.

There is no denying the fact that some
of
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 the public do not eat
meat
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 or
fish
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. They think that
this
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 improves their health and
also
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 benefits the world.
While
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 it is a commonly held belief that some people choose not to eat either
meat
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 or
fish
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 , and they think
this
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have
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has
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 many
advantage
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advantages
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, there is
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider that it is a
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weakness
not
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, not
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 a benefit.
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 with, if you avoid eating
meat
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 or
fish
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, it will affect your health.
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, the
meat
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 and the
fish
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 help you to get energy and to feel good.
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, inside it has many
strength
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.
In addition
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, when you avoid it,
this
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 may reduce your power.
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, many of my friends used to do
this
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, which
have
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has
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negative
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a negative
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 impact on their health,
such
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 as a lot of stress and
bad
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a bad
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 mood. Another point to consider, we
pay
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buy
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the
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apply
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meat
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 and
the
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apply
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fish
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 from shops, so
,
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apply
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 when we avoid
it
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them
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,
this
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 will affect the economy, which is a significant thing
to
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for
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 the government. It is
also
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 possible to say that it
is
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apply
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not only
harm
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harms
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 the citizen but
also
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affect
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affects
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 the country.
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, when we avoid paying the
meat
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 and
the
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apply
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fish
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, shops will not put
it
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them
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 in the store, which
affect
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affects
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 us as
a
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apply
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members of society. In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe that it is a bad thing to do ,and avoiding it will have
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a negiative
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negiative
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negative
 impact
in
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on
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 our lives.

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organization
Plan your essay before you write. Start with a clear view in the first paragraph and a plan for the main ideas.
cohesion
Use simple links to connect ideas, like 'also', 'but', 'for example'.
content
Explain one idea at a time and give a simple reason or example for each.
grammar
Check your spelling and word choice. Use common words and correct form of verbs.
task response
The essay tries to answer the task and says what the writer thinks.
structure
There is a short end that repeats the view.
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