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The graph shows the spending on education, medical care and pension in a particular country from 2001 to 2051. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. (ver 2)

The line chart compares government
expenditure
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 on
education
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,
healthcare
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, and pensions in a country from 2001 to 2051.
Overall
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, spending on pensions increased substantially over the period and became the largest category by 2051.
In contrast
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,
healthcare
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expenditure
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 declined in the later years,
while
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education
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 spending showed a slight decrease before stabilising. In 2001,
education
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 accounted for the highest proportion of total
expenditure
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, at around 15%.
This
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 figure declined gradually to approximately 14% by 2021, after which it remained unchanged until the end of the period. Throughout the timeframe,
education
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 spending showed relatively minor fluctuations compared with the other sectors.
Expenditure
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 on pensions was the lowest at the beginning, remaining at about 6% from 2001 to 2021.
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, it rose sharply
thereafter
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, reaching approximately 18% by 2051, overtaking both
education
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 and
healthcare
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 to become the dominant area of spending.
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,
healthcare
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expenditure
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 stood at around 11% in 2001 and remained stable until 2011, before increasing slightly to 12% in 2021. It
then
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 declined steadily over the following decades, falling to roughly 4% by 2051.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words expenditure, education, healthcare with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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