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The topic of renewable energy is widely discussed these days. What are the main reasons behind the increasing use of renewable energy sources, and is this trend a positive or negative development for the environment?

Nowadays,
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 of renewable
energy
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 has become significantly popular. I strongly believe
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 is a largely positive development for the
environment
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.
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 essay will discuss the main causes of
this
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 trend. One of the primary reasons why
people
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 widely use
the
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renewable
energy
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 is
reduce
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 the electricity bill.
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, the costs of bills increase in some countries
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therefore
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, more
people
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 tend to use renewable
energy
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,
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 as solar power
in
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, in
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 their
home
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homes
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 in order to reduce high electricity costs and save their money. Another major reason in modern cities, they are using wind
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, which
reduce
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reduces
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 carbon emissions and
protect
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protects
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 the air
environment
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.
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, using green
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reduce
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reduces
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the
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global warming
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,
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 as it produces oxygen and
refresh
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refreshes
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 the atmosphere.
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, the government should encourage
people
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 to
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 in order to have fresh air.
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 trend has more advantages
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for
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 the
environment
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as well as
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 our
health
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overall health
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. All the renewable
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energy
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energies
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 are clean and environmentally friendly. They play
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a crucial
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 role in reducing pollution, as
it
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they
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does
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do
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 not produce harmful emissions, which
affects negatively
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on
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heart problems and
breath
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 issues.
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, some individuals prefer using electronic vehicles, which reduce
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carbon dioxide emissions.
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, we have
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quality air. In conclusion, using renewable
energy
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 can save the
environment
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 and reduce health problems.
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,
people
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 should introduce these powers
in
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into
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 their daily
life
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lives
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.

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grammar
Fix the grammar and use simple form. Watch words like 'overusing', 'in modern cities', and 'plants' which should be 'plant trees'.
structure
Use clear topic sentences. Start each paragraph with a main idea and keep one idea per paragraph.
examples
Add one or two exact facts or numbers to show how renewables cut cost or pollution.
coherence
Use linking words to join ideas smoothly, like 'first', 'also', 'but', 'in short'.
idea
The writer has a clear view that renewables help the env.
content
The essay mentions solar and wind power and talk of less pollution.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable
  • depletion
  • carbon emissions
  • fossil fuels
  • solar energy
  • wind power
  • hydroelectric power
  • technological advancements
  • economic growth
  • energy security
  • renewable energy sources
  • environmental impact
  • finite resources
  • investment
  • efficient
  • cost-effective
  • adoption
  • political stability
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