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The table below gives information about the amount of tax collected ( as % of GDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table illustrates the number of
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tax
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taxes
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 collected in five countries between 1975 and 2005.
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, it is evident that
USA
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the USA
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, Sweden, and Japan experienced a significant increase over the
period
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,
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 the
tax
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 in Korea showed a general upward trend
and
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 the
figure
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 in Turkey fluctuated by the end of the
period
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. In detail, there were 46% collected
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tax
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 in
USA
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 at the beginning.
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figure
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 slightly increased to about 25.4% in 1985, and increased to about 27.1% in 1995. In the following year
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figure
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increase
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 to about 27.4% 2005. Sweden experienced a significant increase over the
period
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, with 46% in 1975 and 70.1% in 2005. Turkey got 27.4% by the end of the
period
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. Regarding Japan, the number of
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tax
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taxes
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 collected in Japan was 15% at the beginning, and
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 in the following
year
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this
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figure
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 increased to about 16%. In
1995
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1995,
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 the collected
tax
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 was 23% and
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 36.1% in 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words tax, period, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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