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Your manager has asked you to arrange a programme for three first day at work of a new employee. You can only be there for the morning Write a letter to your manager. In your letter - Explain why you can only be there for the morning. - ⁠say how you could help the new employee in the morning. - ⁠suggest what the new employee could do in the afternoon.

Dear manager, I hope
this
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to inform you that, as you have assigned me the task to train the new worker,
i
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I
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 want to acknowledge you
something
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for something
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.
Last
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 week,
supervisor
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the supervisor
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 was making alterations in the schedule. From the very first day
,
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 I joined the company, I was willing to work
in
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on
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 the early morning shift. I requested her to adjust me
in
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to
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shift
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the shift
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 starting from 5 a.m. Luckily, she agreed
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, and
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timing
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the timing
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is
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 changed, and I will work until 1 PM.
However
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,
i
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I
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 checked about the timing of
new
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the new
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 worker, he is working from 8 AM to 4 PM. Even though
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 sorting and distribution commence after 2 PM,
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I
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 can train him in picking and packing.
Apart from
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this
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,
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I
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 will tell him about all the rules and regulations of the workplace. In my
opinon
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opinion
, tasks being done after my shift
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 can be taught by
supervisor
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a supervisor
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. She is more experienced than
me
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I
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, she can train him well. Please feel free to contact me if you need any
further
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 information. Yours sincerely Ramandeep Kaur.

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Structure
Break the letter into clear parts: intro, reason, how you help, what the new worker can do later, and a short end.
Organization
Put one idea in each part.
Content
Start with a short reason for the morning work and end with a clear note.
Grammar
Check grammar: use capital I, use the end dot, and use comma correctly.
Tone
Keep a formal tone all through the note.
Clarity
Be clear about day and time to avoid mix up.
Conclusion
Close with a polite end.
Form
The start and end are good.
Content
The plan shows what to do for the new worker.
Tone
The tone is proper for work.
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