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Band 4

Living in a country where you have to spake a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Living abroad is
adventurous
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an adventurous
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 experience with a
tase
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taste
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 of culture, food,
tradition
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and tradition
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. The capacity
of speaking
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to speak
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 multiple languages
are
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is
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 definitely a strength.
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,
in
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 some extent, there are limitations. As an experienced example myself that living in Australia and speaking English as
non-native
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a non-native
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language
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, I strongly agree.
that
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language
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 barrier can cause various problems socially.
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 with,
language
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 is the key component of a culture. Those who are not able to use the native
language
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 may miss out on
culture
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cultural
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nuences
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influences
 and
traditional
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traditions
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.
Therefore
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, it causes the lack of community connection and feeling of
loneliess
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loneliness
.
Aditionally
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Additionally
, even with those who are able to speak the
language
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in
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 a proficiency
level
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level,
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 indeed may not have a massive advantage despite their
language
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 potential in the
profession
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enviroment
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environment
. In society's perspective, there are countless
of
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apply
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slangs , idioms and phrases that
challege
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challenge
 their understanding holistically and historically.
Morover
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Moreover
, on a practical level,
language
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barrier
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barriers
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also
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 limit
foreiners'
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foreigners'
 employment
oppotunities
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opportunities
.
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, most
of
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skilled occupational
visa
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visas
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 which are required for foreigners
wish
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wishing
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 to work in Australia demand
a
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an
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in
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 a proficiency or higher score band. Job seekers may struggle to find vacancies in industries,
thus
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 impacting their economic
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growth
which
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, which
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 is significantly correlated to social issues.
Secondly
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, those who are not
practicing
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fluently
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fluent
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 with local by their
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language
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local language
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 face difficulties in accessing essential services
such
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 as healthcare, welfare, education,
legal
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and legal
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 assistance. These
challanges
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challenges
holds
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hold
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strong
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a strong
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 correlation with social
unequity
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inequality
 and unfair treatment, social disparities. Take all points into
accounts
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account
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, there are numerous
of
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apply
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social crises that are related to
langague
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language
 barrier
including
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, including
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 community disengagement, loneliness, employment
oppotunities
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opportunities
,
service
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and service
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assesing
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assessing
.

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planning
Plan your essay first. State your view in the intro, then have two or three clear ideas in the body, and finish with a short conclusion.
grammar
Use simple, short sentences. Check basic grammar and spelling. Aim for clear message in each sentence.
content
Give more clear proof for each idea. Use examples that show social and work issues caused by language help.
lexical
Check key words you use often, such as language, barrier, culture, opportunity, services. Use the best form of these words.
task response
The writer shows a clear view and stance on the topic.
coherence
Attempts to link ideas with connectives and topic flow.
content
Uses a real place (Australia) to give a real example.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • language barrier
  • social integration
  • employment opportunities
  • access to services
  • cultural understanding
  • economic stability
  • isolation
  • misunderstanding
  • community events
  • social activities
  • alienation
  • cultural exchange
  • unequal treatment
  • social disparities
  • fluency
  • job seekers
  • industry requirements
  • language proficiency
  • nuances
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