Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Happiness is a serious business.

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some opine that teenagers are by far the

most happies

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happiest

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people in their daily life, others argue that adulthood comes

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with many enjoyable moments.

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, they are really busy. In my view, the younger

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are, the happier they are. On the one hand, experience goes a long way in living happily. When

individualls

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individuals

get older, they

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usually

gain a lot of knowledge

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through

experiencing many challenges and

diificult

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difficult

moments in all stages of their lives. In

this

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way, they are

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how

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to live to enjoy the moments.

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, they are so

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experienced

that they do not care about

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, which can make them sad, since they strongly believe that happiness is what their lives are all about.

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, there is a

difinite

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definite

link between age and

experincing

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experiencing

exciting things. To clarify, teenagers have

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wellingness

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willingness

to take risks, because they think that it allows them to make themselves up to maximum happy.

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, I myself, when I was

younge

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young

, I used to try new things, which provided the chance to challenge myself.

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boosted my self-confidence to a great extent, and created a great deal of

excitment

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excitement

for me. But nowadays, I do not have a tendency to think about taking risks, and it makes me really stressed out.

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, teenagers are more likely to live happily, since

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their

charecteristics

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characteristics

, they add some

spices

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into their personal life to keep them

motivation

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to keep going. In conclusion,

although

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the elderly have more

experince

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experience

to avoid some situations that affect them

negitively

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negatively

, it does not necessarily mean their younger counterparts cannot do it. I strongly believe that happiness and living in

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exciting way are an inseparable part of teen years.

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task

Plan your essay. Say what you will talk about, then give two views and your own clear view.

coherence

examples

Give one strong example for each view and link it to the point you make.

content

You show you can talk about both sides and give your own view.

structure

You add a personal example from your own life.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

298 words

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