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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart compares the
proportion
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 of
households
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 living in owned
accommodation
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 with those living in rented
accommodation
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 in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011. The contribution of the two groups
were
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was
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 opposite,
households
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 owning their
accommodation
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 dramatically increased,
while
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 those renting their
accommodation
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 significantly plummeted over the period. In 1918, the
proportion
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 of
households
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 living in their own
accommodation
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 was approximately a quarter
to
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of
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 those living in rented
accommodation
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. It went up around 10% and remained stable from 1939 to 1953.
Then
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 it showed a significant rise until 2001, before
finally
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dropped
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dropping
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 in 2011
at
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to
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 65%. In the middle of the time period
which
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, which
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 was in 1971, the contribution of
households
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 owning
accommodation
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 was as high as those that were rented-occupied.
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 to that,
households
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 renting their properties had
three
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a three
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 times higher
proportion
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 than those possessing their own in 1918. It showed a slight decrease in 1939, remained static until 1953, before dramatically
plunged
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plunging
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 and
ended
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ending
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 at 35% in 2011. Over almost 100 years of period time, the
proportion
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 of
households
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 in England and Wales owning their properties had surpassed and marked a two-thirds contribution compared to those who rented.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, households, accommodation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • owner-occupied
  • accommodation
  • households
  • percentage
  • sozio-economic factors
  • post-World War I
  • housing policies
  • economic challenges
  • affordability
  • societal norms
  • mortgage availability
  • economic prosperity
  • reversal
  • property prices
  • younger generations
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