Some parents believe that reading books for entertainment is a waste of time for children and they think that their children should read only read serious educational books. What is your opinion?

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to read

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, some parents are of the opinion that

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of pleasure are a waste of time

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should focus on only their academic

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believe there should be a balance between the two. On the one hand, it is imperative for

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to have time to read for entertainment because it builds their creativity. As an instance, reading comic

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or novels allows these

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to imagine and explore

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it builds their creativity

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is necessary for the developing minds of

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. More so, reading for entertainment develops their social life.

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can make more friends with other kids who share the same

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their type of novel or comics.

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, the study of only academic

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would intermittently boost a

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's cognitive reasoning. As an illustration, by engaging in school

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develop their intelligence for better academic results. Progressively, the study of only academic

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creates a competitive environment for these

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as well because they would strive to be the best in class amongst their peers.

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would develop the

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academically but it neglects the other areas which are important for a

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's mental growth

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as their social life

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and their creativity. In conclusion, reading

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academic

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would only help in academic activities

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it won't give the proper balance a

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needs for proper development.

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Dec 28, 2025

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task

Make a firmer start by giving a clear opinion in one line. Then write 2 body parts that each show one idea with a small example. End with a short, clear conclusion.

coherence

Link ideas more. Use simple words to show how each idea is linked. Start each paragraph with a topic sentence that tells what the paragraph is about.

content

The essay shows a real attempt to state an opinion and to discuss both sides.

organization

Examples are used to support points, showing effort to explain ideas.

structure

There is a basic structure with an introduction, two body parts and a conclusion.

Fully explain your ideas

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

253 words

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