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Should art be a compulsory subjects in schools? Post your response, giving reasons and examples.

There is a question over whether
art
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 classes should be compulsory
science
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apply
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in schools. I support
this
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 view for some valid reasons. There are significant advantages of
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art
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the art
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 subject. To
commance
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commence
 it allows
to
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for
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 problem-solving and creative thinking. Many students nowadays learn
art
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 topics because it gives
both
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them both
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 more motivation and full energy.
For instance
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, if learners study
art
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 science every day, they could gain experience and
to
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learn new insights.
On the other hand
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, despite these advantages of
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art
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 subject, there are some drawbacks.
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 with, if all students study
art
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 every day or practice it regularly, they will not have enough time for other important subjects.
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, they will fail
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thus
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thus,
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 students study it rarely
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 they should create balance.
To sum up
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, both sides have valid arguments.
However
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, I strongly believe that
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art
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the art
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 subject
need
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needs
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learn all learners because it is not only useful but
also
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 more convenient for everyone

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structure
Make your ideas start with a clear topic sentence and stay on one idea in each paragraph.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like first, also, but, and finally to show how ideas are connected.
content
Provide real examples and explain them more. A shorter, clear example is better than many vague ones.
grammar
Check word form and spelling. Fix common mistakes like 'commance', 'science', 'need learn' to 'need to learn'.
content
You state a clear view on the topic.
structure
There is a plan with an intro, a body with two sides, and a conclusion.
coherence
Some linking words are used to show contrast or sequence.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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